Thank you, its quite a nice story! You might want to space the paragraphs and dialogue to make this easier to read. I was slightly thrown off by the changes in and out of first person, but that would be an easy fix. In all, I want to read more, so keep going!
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Date: 2008-04-08 11:38 pm (UTC)